Day before hand in date

I have rewritten the piece in the first person. This has helped to give it a better sense of voice, and also cut down the word limit. As this is the intro to the novel my tutor emphasized quality over quantity so i will not overwrite it to fill the gap. It is about 4500 words out of a limit of 5000 so that seems fine. By writing in the first person it gave me much more opportunity to add humour between Bernadette, Sam and Millie. Bernadette is a more extroverted character in my final draft as i felt her friendship with Millie wasn't clear enough before. She is now the gentle encouragement that gets Millie to go have her photo taken. I have also added a little detail that she fancies the photographer. This is to premeditate the later difficult situation when he hits on her sleazily. But at the start he seems perfect and the reader see him this way too until the relationship takes a darker twist. I have learnt from this assignement that it is very difficult to write a teenage fiction in the thrid person. Although third person is my preferred style i was more successful when i adapted my writing style to the story rather than the other way around.