Still editing.

It is proving difficult to write this piece - mainly because my mind is set in the science fiction essay style of previous uni work! Pippa has helped with suggestions of how i can cut down my over written latest draft. Pippa commented that "the problem with being very literary and clever in your writing is that we readers tend to focus on the writing rather than the story, which isn't what you want, especially in a teenage read." With this in mind i will be substantially cutting down the 'telling' parts, for instance the story of Sophie spilling drink on Kirsty - as she is not a major character in any way.

I am considering a drastic overhaul, as my editing is not helping me make it better. I may rewrite the whole story in the first person. That way, it would be easier to get her voice across, and lose the over formal narrating.

Pretty settled on Corgi Childrens (an imprint of Random House Children's Books) for my publisher.